Stella the dog

[Efeu]

Name: Stella

Gender:Female

Race:Dog Husky

Age:2 years


Description:

Primary Elements
1.) Light
2.) Earth
3.) Water
4.) Wind


Base Ability: Poison Bite
As the name says Its a Bite O Poison
Base Ability Cool Down: N/A
Lasts: 3 posts
Damage:Minor

Tier One
1st Skill: .Earth Wall
protects zdynasty and with a wall of the earth
Cool down: 5 posts
2nd Skill: Bark of the winds
A bark that can change the speed of wind but only to 35 MPH (lightly shakes your clothes) (might distract opponent)
Cool down: 3 posts
3nd Skill: Bark of Rain
Makes it Rain (Might distract opponent)
Cool Down: 3 posts
4th Skill: Bark Of Health
Heals minor wounds
5th Skill: Bark Of Raining Fire
Its A Bark that makes it Rain Fire
Cool Down:9 posts
Lasts: 3 posts
Skill 6:Dig
Cool Down: n/a
Dig her way around
Skill 7: Claws
Use her claws as a weapon
Cool Down: N/A


(she likes to bark apparently)

[Game Master]

If I may give some advice: try to completely fill out the template up to the end of Tier one. You aren't required to, but this is a competitive site where death is a very real threat that is not easily reversed without either amazing writing skills or lots of in character magic.

The bite is not a base ability. You should give more thought to what it would be, since the base ability is potentially the most powerful depending on how you develop it.

Drop Earth Walls cooldown to five posts.

Drop Bark of the Winds to three posts.

As a reference, you can use more elements than those listed. But, those listed are the ones you have decided to specialize in.

[Efeu]

all right I fix it also I knew she could use more than the elements there just a coincident

[Game Master]

How much damage does the poison from poison bite do? How many posts does it last?

Bark of Revive is too powerful to have at Tier One. You'll need to make another skill.

You still have space for three more skills on the character. While it is not required, I advise making use of them. If you don't, we can come back and add them in later.

[Efeu]

I did what you said I cant think of three other things so yeah there

[Game Master]

Well, if you need me to, I can break some of this down and give you more options.

It definitely reads as though you are trying to pigeonhole yourself with only giving the animal bark-themed abilities.  That's actually a huge weakness- if somebody with Space, for instance, uses a spell that deadens sound all of these are effectively useless.

Or if a person manages to hit this with a Silence spell, the barks would simply become normal barks.

Now, I can plainly see you intend to use this for character support. However, you should have some more offensive abilities. Also, keep in mind, a player doesn't have to be distracted by wind and rain.

I'm trying not to tell you what to do, but lead you into doing more with what you have. That way, in the future, you can continue to improve yourself. I understand that this is a new system for you, so I want to help you come into it, but I can't do it for you.

With that said, think about other things dogs can do. This one has the earth element, so it might be really good at digging...

[Efeu]

alright I did what I could to fix what you said

[Game Master]

I see that you are having difficulty creating skills for her.

I'm going to approve this, but I want you to come back later and apply what you learn through combat on this site and show me what you can do with this character. As it stands now, she isn't at her full potential.

Approved.

[Efeu]

Okay.... thanks I will

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